Wednesday, September 25, 2013

Daastaan... Adhoori si

 Chand nikla nahi tha shayad us raat
Par sitaaron ki chamak saath chal rahi thi
Kya hum ja sakte hain wahaan dobara?
Woh baat sun-ne ko jab dhadkan machal rahi thi?
Chaand keh kar pukara tha tumne mujhe
Tab halki si muskaan mein sharm sama gayi thi
“Pagal” kehkar matha thapthapaya tha mera
Kyun? Kya main woh ehsaas tum mein jaga gayi thi?

Amavas ko dhang se na samajh paaoon
So tumne chand se muqabla kar diya mera
Khush thi ki roshni ban gayi hoon tumhari
Par yeh bhi yaad ki chaand samete hai andhera
Poori qaaynaat par noor chhalkata, phir chhupata
Woh ek raaz, ek aas, ek aarzu, ek gumshuda chehra
Tum padh nahi paaye mere khamosh andhere
Ab dushmani kar baitha hai zindagi se savera

Thake kandhe par sar, haath mein tumhara haath
Main chali ja rahi thi machalti chahat ko dabaye
Sard raat thi, laal shawl ke neeche dil thithur raha tha
Par yaad is kambakht ko tab bhi tumhari saanson ki garmaahat aaye
Tumne hi kaha tha, thandi hawa pyaar ko bhadkaati hai
“Paas raho, ab chhoti si doori bhi sataaye”
Tabse kitni sardiyaan, ya kahoon sadiyaan beet gayi hain
Thandak phir badan ko choom ke gayi, par tum toh na aaye

Saal bhar mein se bas sardiyaan yaad reh jaati hain ab
Aksar tumhari baaton ki chaadar ke peechhe chhup jaati hoon
Na bebas hoon, na badgumaan, na pyaar kam hua hai mera
Main toh mushkil yaadon ki bhi dhun bana, usse gungunaati hoon
Dua ki chaukhat pe baithe dekha hoga tumne mujhe
Andar jhaank ke, main waapas bhaag aati hoon
Sochti hoon ki pyaar maang, tumhe chheen kar le aaoongi
Par wahaan tumhara aks dekh, tumhari khushi ke liye lalchaati hoon

Meri baatein, meri kahaaniyaan yaad hain tumhe?
Sunte-sunte tum aksar thak jaate the
Kabhi hans padte, toh kabhi tok dete, kabhi na samajhte
Baaton ke matlab musalsal, sirf lafz badal jaate the
Suno, azeem lafzon ki riyaasaton ke beech dekhna
Wahin kuchh chhote gaaon hain jinme maayne samaate the
Saath chal rahi, tum kaise meri aankhein padh paate?
Un dono mein hi toh raat ke bewatan kisse timtimaate the.

Woh raat chali nahi wahaan se, waqt mein tham si gayi  hai
Woh daastaan bhi badhi nahi aage, kaali syahi mein jam gayi hai
Waqt jo kilkaariyaan marta, gudgudee karta
Waqt, woh aansu chhupata, siskiyaan dabata
Waqt jo waqt jaisa nahi tha
Waqt, jo par lagaaye khada tha
Jise yaad kar, muskuraate ho tum abhi 
Jise bhool aaye usi raaste, usi raat kahin

Aansu behte hain kabhi kabhi
Par muskaan honthon pe tik gayi hai
Tum mujhe apni kahaani toh poori suna gaye
Humaari daastaan magar adhoori reh gayi hai

I could not have found a better artist than Afremov, yet again, to express in pictures what I have attempted to in words. When I recited the above poem in front of my classmates at college, one of them said in a tone of surprise, "Saumya, you are really romantic at heart!", and I was left scratching my head, wondering, how did she miss that! Another friend who heard it said that to have written all this, I MUST have felt an intense amount of love. I prevaricated, but smiled to myself. In my reckoning 'intense amount of love' is a euphemism of sorts. Adding figments of fiction to life is fun, but it also sometimes makes a spark into a conflagration. Building castles of love is not the most advisable thing to do, but hey, its a risk worth taking. I'll end the nonsense here. 

This is my first genuine attempt in Hindi. PACH made me do this. That same crazy, magical PACH. 


  1. Brilliant !! Doesn't sound like your first attempt ;-)

  2. I liked this poem. Extremely emotional, 'Waqt jo waqt jaisa nahi tha.' And it reminds me the song 'Mera Kuchha Saman Tumhare Pas Pada Hai.'

    I fully agree with the sentence, 'Adding figments of fiction to life is fun, but it also sometimes makes a spark into a conflagration.'
    My friend Vincent [ blogger here] wrote me once. Writing a Blog is an art and many a times it has nothing to do with your real life.
    You are a gifted writer, I want to add.

    1. Thank you sir.

      You always take out time to encourage us with the most beautiful thoughts and words. All of us at PACH really value it, I have to let you know. When a gifted writer calls me gifted, it makes for an extremely happy feeling. Thanks again!

  3. Bahut khoob Saumya ! Yeh padh kar itna acha lag raha hai - kya bataun .. umda likha hai !

    1. Sonalika di! Aapne suni hoti toh aapko aur achchha lagta. Kabhi sunayenge :)

  4. "Tum apni kahaani toh poori suna gaye tum
    Humaari daastaan magar adhoori reh gayi hai"

    Bang on Saumya..its so beautiful..every word reflects a life within.
    More power to u.

    1. Thanks a lot!

      Do I know you by any chance? Your comment here reflects some familiarity, hence asking.

      And those two lines at the end, they are among my favourites too. Thanks, for liking and leaving a feedback.

    2. Umm..i have no idea whether our paths have crossed or not..

      But i find a connect to you by your exceptionally beautiful art of writing..

      Quite frankly whenever i feel low and want to get charged up or else when im stuck somewhere on coding(excuse my job..*wink*), i take a time off and drop in to nascent emissions, such is the impact of your posts.

      Keep writing for your fans like me:-)
      God bless.

    3. Don't call yourself a fan. Call yourself an encouragement. That is what I get by reading comments like the ones you leave. Thanks!

  5. I loved reading this . thank you for posting. I might have not asked you to share it with me ( no reason :) ) But sincere thanks for this. I felt more connected reading this than when you recited.

    As for making castles of love and adding fiction to life , its worth the risk. It some times make you believe the impossible. It hurts a lot of times. You might feel foolish and disheartened some days. but hey , in the end it does leave a lot of smiles :) And such awesome posts !!

    1. Its worth the risk. Yes, I agree. I always will. Without undertaking that risk, you can never know what beauty lies on the other side. Even if not, then the prospect is worth chasing. I am a romantic and a believer Nimue, so I shall remain :)

  6. Every single line leaves my spine tingling. It's really an alternate feeling that I get after reading this. I really don't know what to say, but it's a pleasure to know you Saumya di for I can feel what you feel through your writing, and what you feel is rare. :)

    1. Karan!

      To your comment, I do not know how to respond. All I can say is, I am glad I am connected with you in a better manner now. You have this love in you which radiates all around. I like it. Really do.

  7. There are not many writers who can manage to write so flawlessly both in English and Hindi. You are special. I loved this, every single line. It had a similar effect on me, as 'Thousand Times Over' did. I get goosebumps.

    You say this is your first attempt in Hindi. I believe it is our first tryst with the kind of awesomeness yet to come. Good luck and Thank you!

    1. Aaqib, I was sad you did not listen to it. But someday, I have to recite it to you. I just HAVE to. You are among those people whom I write for, now. And your positive feedback on this one means so much. Thanks :)

  8. This is absolutely beautiful Saumya di. Keep writing :)

  9. Oh Saumya! I love the narrative..its heartwarming..its sane..and it leaves me with a pinch in the end (the postscript). It is like you are carrying a legacy of writing so beautifully from way can this be looked at one's first attempt in hindi:)

    1. Bhaiya!

      This is the brilliant surprise I think I so wanted. You know how much your words, your feedback means. I wish I could run all the way to Jaipur and give you an awesome hug. Thanks!

  10. WOW! please stay crazy, infact get more crazier, some lines jst stayed with me long after i ended, beautiful!

    1. So glad you are back! I had not known you are into poetry, much less Hindustani poetry. You should come for PACH sometime if you find time.

  11. Wow!!!! This has left me spellbound.

    1. So glad :)

      Come down to PACH, I'll recite this one for you.

  12. Sard raat thi, laal shawl ke neeche dil thithur raha tha!!!

    Saal bhar mein se bas sardiyaan yaad reh jaati hain ab!!!

    1. Both among my favourites, both noticed by Ashok Chakradhar sir :)

  13. This is undoubtedly my favorite. I'm gonna memorize this. :')