tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post890614454223245491..comments2024-03-01T15:52:17.308+05:30Comments on Nascent Emissions: Unwritten Saumya Kulshreshthahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-85070350823987063972015-05-02T19:36:06.961+05:302015-05-02T19:36:06.961+05:30hey hey jus read this the third time!!! saumyaaa y...hey hey jus read this the third time!!! saumyaaa your words are visual delightttt!!! i love your talent of making ur audience drift into a mental movie as good as the one we see n cinema's... <br />may your heart keep breaking until it opens, and may these cracks keep triggering such mesmerising work!!! <br />keep the show on sweetheart!!! <br /><br />p.sss - we have a due date!! loads to catch upAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14657140110266308464noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-82137880538673261732014-06-13T08:27:21.272+05:302014-06-13T08:27:21.272+05:30Hey Saumya,
This is a nice mood piece. Is it abou...Hey Saumya,<br /><br />This is a nice mood piece. Is it about a stranger or a past love? I got the feeling that you didn't really know this person, but maybe I read it wrong?<br /><br />While the words are good, the prose, I think, is a little clunky. Maybe it's all the long adjectives that you've used. We sometimes make the mistake of thinking that nobody will take us seriously unless we use long, complicated descriptive words (adjectives and adverbs). More often than not, they steal attention from the nouns and verbs instead of enhancing them.<br /><br />'Miniaturized', 'performative', 'fiercely enticing', 'gloriously unwritten' - these are all adjectives that force the reader to pay attention, whereas the nouns and verbs are what we really care about. A good way to get around this is to write a bare sentence first, and then add in adjectives if you think they're necessary. For instance, would 'he was the plot of an unwritten novel' be more powerful?<br /><br />Ultimately, of course, it's your piece :-)Sharath Komarrajuhttp://sharathkomarraju.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-80534534680113146552014-06-12T21:29:08.505+05:302014-06-12T21:29:08.505+05:30Thanks Jitu ji. Like always, the encouragement is ...Thanks Jitu ji. Like always, the encouragement is valued :) Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-80766094229813680072014-06-12T21:28:48.838+05:302014-06-12T21:28:48.838+05:30Haha! You were the one to tell me about them, so t...Haha! You were the one to tell me about them, so thanks to you :) <br /><br />And I hope you read the sequel too :) Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-19542860677662269332014-06-12T21:28:16.454+05:302014-06-12T21:28:16.454+05:30And I am waiting for your response to the sequel :...And I am waiting for your response to the sequel :) Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-12407930901867065322014-06-12T21:27:46.271+05:302014-06-12T21:27:46.271+05:30:) Thanks, I am really glad you read. :) Thanks, I am really glad you read. Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-83141849502506862772014-06-12T21:27:11.675+05:302014-06-12T21:27:11.675+05:30That tea does have something magical about it - be...That tea does have something magical about it - beautifully written! Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-74008917401496601302014-06-11T14:14:25.977+05:302014-06-11T14:14:25.977+05:30Somehow your 'Earl Grey' and 'He' ...Somehow your 'Earl Grey' and 'He' inspired me to write. I wanted to use the same brand of tea as I love the name but then thought would be repetitive but still. Here read->https://whisperingwithwords.wordpress.com/2014/06/09/he/Lady Whispershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15051384418188753857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-59363217011356163032014-06-09T23:08:48.411+05:302014-06-09T23:08:48.411+05:30Your writing is as vibrant as you are. Congratulat...Your writing is as vibrant as you are. Congratulation for achieving 100K and beyond.jiturajgorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17357330819451319528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-21958413032981118582014-06-09T13:21:32.200+05:302014-06-09T13:21:32.200+05:30Beautifully written and I do agree with Amrit. It ...Beautifully written and I do agree with Amrit. It felt real, sandwiched between the smell of Earl Grey and the beautiful thoughts. As always, pleasure reading.<br /><br />Much love<br /><br />P.S.- 1 Million views. Wooohhhhhooo!!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10003267819081890560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-22464514776925850832014-06-09T12:37:39.834+05:302014-06-09T12:37:39.834+05:30You had me mesmerized, slowly drawing me deep into...You had me mesmerized, slowly drawing me deep into the web of words you've so beautifully woven. Sometimes we do have memories associated with the most mundane things like the way your phone vibrates or the sound you hear when the door creaks open. You've captured so much in such less words. Yet it leaves me curious for more.Maanyahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12795266836835942051noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-49504095374571054272014-06-09T10:22:53.223+05:302014-06-09T10:22:53.223+05:30achcha likha hai.... all those incomplete details ...achcha likha hai.... all those incomplete details which you know but you dont want to write because you don't want to kill that subtle good part. you just want to write the good part.Siddharthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09596639366526599502noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-64933369294683242832014-06-09T02:12:03.042+05:302014-06-09T02:12:03.042+05:30Olfactory remembrances are, in fact, the strongest...Olfactory remembrances are, in fact, the strongest memories we make. You've also reminded me of some very fond smells of childhood - will write about them someday, perhaps. Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-43815528182254859882014-06-09T02:11:01.382+05:302014-06-09T02:11:01.382+05:30Thanks a lot!Thanks a lot!Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-215451209564812172014-06-09T02:10:41.481+05:302014-06-09T02:10:41.481+05:30Oh yes, I have not read anything you wrote since l...Oh yes, I have not read anything you wrote since long. Do share soon! Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-33030746572676591812014-06-09T02:08:26.393+05:302014-06-09T02:08:26.393+05:30I do know what you mean, and perhaps it is over a ...I do know what you mean, and perhaps it is over a cup of Earl Grey that you and I should plan to catch up! Saumya Kulshreshthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05195931245951633406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-76494346883368574932014-06-09T02:02:02.193+05:302014-06-09T02:02:02.193+05:30Well,part of it makes me believe that its not a fi...Well,part of it makes me believe that its not a fiction,its a self experienced thing sandwiched with a beautiful analogy of sipping a cup of tea.I often associate olfactory remembrance more close to my heart whether its the red eraser I used in my Kg class,or the smell of the shampoo of a girl in my school bus,or the tangy smell of unused woolen clothes kept in ny drawer or the spices my mom uses in the sabjis she makes,or the perfume that a particular person wears its all there in my mind,not the name not anything specifically but these kind of smells ting a particular bell in my mind .Keep writing :) amrithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05592426809102722648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-47374166530746785192014-06-08T17:20:37.766+05:302014-06-08T17:20:37.766+05:30Excellent :) This has been inspiring ;) Excellent :) This has been inspiring ;) Pratibhahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03060001943746107173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-77768040737426037172014-06-08T16:21:24.366+05:302014-06-08T16:21:24.366+05:30Wow. I love the command you have over words and ex...Wow. I love the command you have over words and expressions. Just perfect this is.<br />This piece almost inspired me to pen some fiction. Been a while. Such was the magic of this piece.<br />Beautifully written.Lady Whispershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15051384418188753857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1901701252396078909.post-83997041620768850012014-06-08T15:30:31.927+05:302014-06-08T15:30:31.927+05:30Perfectly captured Saumya! Well done! Sometimes, t...Perfectly captured Saumya! Well done! Sometimes, the smell of the earl grey is also something we have imagined and that imagination makes the earl grey (also it's lovely name) smell stronger, perhaps more pleasurable, when in reality it is probably not. You know what I mean. <br /><br />I love your writing! Sonalika Chaturvedihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18228312585014481255noreply@blogger.com